(1) If your favorite rock star asked you to jump off a bridge, would you do it?
(2) Of course not; no way!
(3) You would tell the rock star to take his money.
(4) Then go back to his mansion, and stuff it.
(5) You make your own decisions; the idea of risking your life on the whim of a famous singer is just plain
nonsense.
(6) Even if you truly adore music, it is not a factor that dictates your every move.
(7) Some young people would do anything for a particular music performer.
(8) They would flock to jump off the bridge if their favorite music icon asked them to do so.
(9) Because popular music, more than any other aspect of youth culture, holds an extremely powerful clutch on
its very impressionable audience.
(10) Occasionally that clutch can have a positive effect.
(11) For example, some artists put forth positive messages.
(12) More often, however, the messages in popular songs are destructive.
(13) Children require guidance, and they are easily fooled by music that provides either false hope or
hopelessness.
(14) Adults need to learn about popular music to know which performers preach a positive (or at least
harmless) message and those that can be truly destructive to a young person’s life.
(15) This is a tough job.
(16) But it is an important job.
Which of the following is the best way to revise sentence 2?